A galloping horse is like a soaring eagle,
letting his hooves berely meet the ground.
a stallion is like a lion,
when his herad is in danger.
a horse is as gentle as a butterfly,
carrying his rider across feilds.
afterwards standing silently
while her rider cares for her.
a new born colt is as robusk as a tasmaninan devil
galloping and jumping for the lilttlest thing
a mare can be jaguar when her foal is in danger,
yet getle like a lady bug when baby is near.
horses are magestic beast
and always will be
This is nice. But, I would like to see more of a 'broken thoughts' kind of thing rather than complete thoughts. I mean, if you think about it--if you took this and wrote it without hitting the enter button, added puncuation and correct grammar (i.e. capitalization) this sounds exactly like an introductory to an essay about horses rather than a poem. It's not really a good thing when a poem can also easily pass as an essay.
Happy Editing!
WM
That was really nice!
with me being a big fan of horses and all,
you did a great job with the metaphors and similes, and they were very creative
7/10
keep writing!
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